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"I love you," you said. "And I'll love you forever"--
That time everything felt so warm and so right.
You told me I was pretty, you told me I was clever,
How beautiful I was and how my fur was so white.
You made me feel the safest any pet could ever feel,
You gave me tasty food and hugged me every day,
I liked to hop with you into your box of steel--
We'd go to a park and at your lap my muzzle I'd lay.
That certain day your box of steel as always opened up
And I hopped in right next to you, I licked your face in glee:
Another trip that was to be, I was happy as a pup,
Completely unaware what you meant to do to me.
We went through webs of roads, but you didn't say a thing,
And knowing this was special, I kept my mouth shut, too.
Suddenly you stepped on breaks, I felt an abrupt sting,
My nose hurt and I turned to you for that magic you could do.
You didn't kiss me, though, you didn't ease the pain.
You pushed me hard, the box of steel went on like a dart--
I yelped in terror, ran after you, but I knew it was in vain,
The bleeding nose was nothing compared to bleeding heart.
That time everything felt so warm and so right.
You told me I was pretty, you told me I was clever,
How beautiful I was and how my fur was so white.
You made me feel the safest any pet could ever feel,
You gave me tasty food and hugged me every day,
I liked to hop with you into your box of steel--
We'd go to a park and at your lap my muzzle I'd lay.
That certain day your box of steel as always opened up
And I hopped in right next to you, I licked your face in glee:
Another trip that was to be, I was happy as a pup,
Completely unaware what you meant to do to me.
We went through webs of roads, but you didn't say a thing,
And knowing this was special, I kept my mouth shut, too.
Suddenly you stepped on breaks, I felt an abrupt sting,
My nose hurt and I turned to you for that magic you could do.
You didn't kiss me, though, you didn't ease the pain.
You pushed me hard, the box of steel went on like a dart--
I yelped in terror, ran after you, but I knew it was in vain,
The bleeding nose was nothing compared to bleeding heart.
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My entry for 
*KyeWriting's poetry contest about animals: [link]
That poem, well... Hard to say. I just wanted to awake some emotions, give people a taste what their dog might feel like at times, even though there are no words that could give out how a neglected animal feels.
24 lines accounted for.
EDIT: Thank you, *KyeWriting, for the honorable mention!
I edited the poem to make it more grammatically correct. The major changes involve the last line of the second stanza and additional "the" in the last line of the whole poem.
EDIT 2:
Another one, just finishing touches. Changes the dot at the end of the second line of the last stanza to dashes - I think it helps the flow better, showing how fast everything happened. I also decided to change the first line of the same stanza to "ease the pain". "Kill the pain"? What was I even thinking?
And huge thanks to all the people who read, faved and/or commented on "Box of Steel"! I really appreciate it, especially that I have high hopes regarding this one.
*KyeWriting's poetry contest about animals: [link]That poem, well... Hard to say. I just wanted to awake some emotions, give people a taste what their dog might feel like at times, even though there are no words that could give out how a neglected animal feels.
24 lines accounted for.
EDIT: Thank you, *KyeWriting, for the honorable mention!
I edited the poem to make it more grammatically correct. The major changes involve the last line of the second stanza and additional "the" in the last line of the whole poem.
EDIT 2:
Another one, just finishing touches. Changes the dot at the end of the second line of the last stanza to dashes - I think it helps the flow better, showing how fast everything happened. I also decided to change the first line of the same stanza to "ease the pain". "Kill the pain"? What was I even thinking?
And huge thanks to all the people who read, faved and/or commented on "Box of Steel"! I really appreciate it, especially that I have high hopes regarding this one.
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How sad. I admit I get intimidated around dogs, but I would want to see one become neglected. I remember a few years back I looked after an 11th month old Labrador, who lost it's owner. She (the owner) slipped and smacked her head on some ice outside my flat. Myself and this Romanian lady took care of her dog, and once we reunited dog with owner we all stood around in the cold passing around a bottle of vodka. Still with your poem I could feel the pain and emotion. It's wonderfully written. Great job.